Tell me once more where did i go wrong I believed the fake smiles for so long Watch me as my mind starts to bleed I’m losing grasp just trying to breath
I feel confused, I feel misguided I just know in my head that I've done something terribly wrong But i can’t point it out
Show me something more beautiful Then the moonlight we would watch Show me something more impassioned Then the rage inside your eyes
And through the raging yells and shouts i can still hear your old laugh making me come to terms that love is blind, but also deaf Burn the pictures, burn the flowers Burn Infected parts of my head killing pieces of my soul that i would rather would stay dead
Tell me once more how right were you cause I’m beginning to doubt whats true It seems to be just what you sought I guess it must be someone’s fault
So much silence, world’s saddest sound As one more bottle of Scotch falls down to the ground Now look at what you did Show me something more Integral Then the sins we’re to confess Show me something more expandable Then our memories of our past
And through the raging yells and shouts I can still hear your old laugh Making me come to terms that Love is blind, but also deaf Burn the pictures, burn the flowers Burn Infected parts of my head Killing pieces of my soul that I would rather would stay dead
רעיונות מעניינים כאן.
אמנם צריך להיזהר יותר עם איות (השתמש ב spellcheck)
יש חרוזים פה ושם אבל לא בצורה אחידה (גם bleed ו-breathe לא מתחרזים)
אבל כדאי להמשיך להתאמן בכתיבה. יש כוון טוב.
בהצלחה